Six Things That Moved Me to Tears- Positively and Negatively (Take One)

Apple's iPod: I've Got the World on a String (Shaped Earphone Chord):


Loved:
1. Discussing the "hipness" of the iPod- plus I loved the word hipness that the author made up!
2. Bringing up "What iPod are you?
3. iPod's simplicity makes it the best
4. Podcasts- I sometimes forget how helpful they can be
5. I loved the cool, "hipster language" you invented/used
6. Facts at the beginning added a nice touch!

Did Not Love:
1. Grammatical Errors! Made the essay hard to read!
2. Talked too much about the product itself and the "facts" about the product
3. Run-Sentences made it tedious to read at times
4. Some paragraphs were also too long!  They could be split up to be better.
5. Sometimes used too much "technical language" which made it hard to understand
6. Did not seem personal- no personal stories about the author using an iPod